Paper 3 Revision Strategy

I feel like my essay wasn’t complete. I had a good start and thats the goal of a free draft a feel. My thesis wasn’t strong enough and didn’t make sense and didn’t back up my claims so I think that will be a good spot to start. All of my claims talk about the … [Read more…]

Beauty in Sports

I found an article called “The Math Behind Beauty” in Discover Magazine and it described how we all depend on beauty, but not everyone knows what it is. The main idea is that we all see beauty mainly in how we look and there is a “golden ratio” in how looks can make us beautiful. Dr. … [Read more…]

Revising to be More Specific

What I fixed: I read chapter 8 from They Say, I Say and it was about connecting the parts. There were areas in my paper when I wasnt precise enough and I read that I needed to connect the part by being more specific. I had vagueness in my writing when I was trying to describe a … [Read more…]

Integration of quotes using Barlcays Formula

Science is the what will determine our future, but unfortunately it is being attacked from multiple angles by, as physicist Mark B. Boslough says “those who twist legitimate multiculturalism by going way beyond.” Science is also being attacked by religion due to fundamentalists ignoring anything that is not backed up in the bible. There is … [Read more…]

Going Against the Grain

Integrating art into the STEM idea of learning is very unrealistic and feels unnecessary for being able to accomplish the American dream. That dream is the main goal for all Americans; they want to live a happy comfortable life with plenty of money. Art is just not as necessary in present day work due to … [Read more…]

Art is a Strong Part of Education

Yo Yo Ma is a very famous cellist and songwriter. He Is an Asian man that has won 27 Grammy’s from his strong work as a cellist. He is a well educated man that studied at the Juilliard School and a Harvard University graduate. The essay “Necessary Edges: Arts, Empathy and Education” was originally published … [Read more…]