Original:Joy is what I see as the opposite of suffering; the ultimate goal of living a happy life. It is a strong emotion that can dictate how your day goes. Now a days I see a prime part of suffering can be controlled. I empathize how the people suffering felt and realized that the help would mean the world to me. As I thought deeper about Rhy Southan’s essay, I looked at the opportunity that is offered to everyone. Everyone in school has a chance to be attentive and really participate in the class, but not everyone does this. I see kids fooling around and skipping class and my empathy for them is instantly gone. It makes me feel like it is not my job to work as hard as I can to ensure I have a happy life to also give some relief on to their mistake they made years ago. I fully understand the factors that can not be controlled and I would love to contribute to the eventually end of there suffering. If someone is suffering with an illness, but can’t afford a treatment, working hard in life and donating here and there to ensure there joy is restored is an excellent goal.
Edited:Joy is what I see as the opposite of suffering; the ultimate goal of living a happy life. It is a strong emotion that can dictate how your day goes. Now a days I see a prime part of suffering can be controlled. Peter singer says “Suppose you saw a child drowning in a pond: would you jump in and rescue her, even if you hadn’t pushed her in? Even if it meant ruining your clothes? It would be highly controversial to say ‘no’ – and yet most of us manage to ignore those dying of poverty and preventable disease all over the world, though we could easily help them.” I empathized how the child in the pond felt but also how as Singer states how people suffer everywhere and realized that the help would mean the world to me. As I thought deeper about this analogy, I made a comparison with real life issues. I thought of the pond as drug abuse, alcoholism and crime. I compared the kid to any kid and saw how one can get caught in this trap until they drown. I looked at the opportunity that is offered to everyone. Everyone in school has a chance to be attentive and really participate in the class, but not everyone does this. I see kids fooling around and skipping class. I see people partying and feel like this is more important then anything else and my empathy for them is instantly gone. It makes me feel like it is not my job to work as hard as I can to ensure I have a happy life to also give some relief to their mistake they made years ago. I also see the pond as sickness and I fully understand the factors that can not be controlled. I would love to contribute to the eventually end of there suffering. If someone is suffering with an illness, but can’t afford a treatment, working hard in life and donating here and there to ensure there joy is restored is an excellent goal.
What did I do?
I added the small pond analogy and put so context referring to it in the edited paragraph.
Original: The TED talk “How Painting Can Transform Communities” by Dre Urhahn and Jeroen Koolhaas was an example of how art can impact a vast population and it was through multiple aspects of their art. The communities they hit were drowning in poverty and were infamous for crime and the unappealing look, but Haas and Hahn saw them differently. They started off in Rio to film for a documentary about the life in favelas, the Brazilian slums. They noticed the purpose of these favelas and it shaped the way the viewed art. The favelas were built from the ground up with no plan so a lot of them weren’t finished and gave the city a bad look. Haas and Hahn looked at all the favelas on the hill and wanted to paint the buildings to give the cities significance and beauty. They advertised a lot and received the appropriate funding needed of 100,000 dollars. The money was so significant in their project because “now we finally had the freedom to use all the lessons that we had learned and create a project that was built the same way that the favela was built, from the ground on up, bottom up, with no master plan.”
Edited: The TED talk “How Painting Can Transform Communities” by Dre Urhahn and Jeroen Koolhaas was an example of how art can impact a vast population and it was through multiple aspects of their art. The communities they hit were “emerged over the years when immigrants from the countryside came to the cities looking for work, like cities within the cities, known for problems like crime, poverty, and the violent drug war between police and the drug gangs.” They started off in Rio to film for a documentary about the life in favelas, the Brazilian slums. They noticed the purpose of these favelas and it shaped the way the viewed art. The favelas were built from the ground up with no plan so a lot of them weren’t finished and gave the city a bad look. Haas and Hahn looked at all the favelas on the hill and wanted to paint the buildings to give the cities significance and beauty. They advertised a lot and received the appropriate funding needed of 100,000 dollars. The money was so significant in their project because “now we finally had the freedom to use all the lessons that we had learned and create a project that was built the same way that the favela was built, from the ground on up, bottom up, with no master plan.”
What I do?
I added a quote to explain why haas and hahn was talking about and it put more of what they were saying in the essay and less of my summary.
